Heart-shaped boxes & heart-shaped cards,
Heart-shaped chocolates & heart-shaped hearts!
In colors of red, pink & white,
& a beautiful red rose, I hope she likes…
5 ml perfume, 15 ml deo
Spirits are high & the Sun is bright yellow!
O mirror grand, reflect the truth!
How do I look from head to foot?
I am going to propose her! It’s the big day!
& the timing is perfect! Today is V-Day!
Wrong & evil, the elders claim.
But that’s nonsense so, let them blame…
& now, she’s my Valentine; I feel so famed!
But my desires are becoming harder to tame…
I am getting carried away, I am getting tempted…
What have I done?! My soul is dented!
I am so sorry for coming in your life!
But you shouldn’t have let me, until I made you my wife.
But what has happened cannot be undone...
Alas! We must repent for what we’ve done…
Wicked yet tempting are these affairs…
Stay away from them lest they flare!
To live without regret, better beware…
& your life's mortal so, you should care.
I loved it yaar, especially till 5-6 prose, but then why did you have to put that love after marriage thingy! It spoiled it a little. But, it is still pretty good. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot Shoaib! :) & the part you didn't like is the moral of my poem, & without that it would just be some rhyming lines without any message...
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ReplyDeletenice poem!
"O mirror grand, reflect the truth!
How do I look from head to foot? "
"Wrong & evil, the elders claim.
But that’s nonsense so, let them blame…
& now, she’s my Valentine; I feel so famed!
But my desires are becoming harder to tame…"
well coined :)
Thanks a lot for that beautiful token of appreciation. :)
ReplyDeleteyour welcome
ReplyDeleteI like the way you tried to convey your message ..nice work,you are on the way..:)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot for appreciating it. :) I hope you liked the message too. ;)
ReplyDeleteMohib.. Um flattered.. that was a master piece.. well laid.. keep it up..
ReplyDeleteNo dude, I am flattered! Thanks a lot for all those compliments! :) They inspire me to be even more creative! :)
ReplyDeleteMohib i seriously had no idea u had posted this in april... i just came across it now (from fb)... great yaar.. ur word power is great..indeed.. (n nice moral too)
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot, Altaf! Of course, you'd like the moral! :D I am glad that you read it. :) By the way, I posted it on the V-Day of 2010. :D
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